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To be like you

Mar 2, 2003, 10:56:49 AM by ~atomicfeline
Literature / Poetry / Philosophical / Open

How old must I be, mommy?
To be like you
The hardships I go through
Just to much to bear

It isn\'t even fair
That you should be much smarter
And I\'m compared to water
What must it take, mommy?
To be like you

What does it take?
Don\'t I ever get a break?
When does it all end?
Where is life\'s recess?
A few seconds of freedom
When I can smell the flowers in the field
The dirt beneath my feet
Will it ever happen, mommy?
Will I become like you?

I never feel complete
And it seems I can\'t compete
There\'s always work to be done
Where is all the fun?
Is this what life is all about?
I never have time to shout
How much I would love it, mommy
If I was more like you

Even though you\'re not around
I remember that horrible big sound
As you were huddled close to me
Crying as you were hugging me
I was angry as the man was hurting you
He was yelling. It was so scary, mommy
It would mean so much more if you only knew
How much I would really love it, mommy
How much I want to be like you

And as I drop these flowers in front of your grave
I keep knocking myself thinking I could\'ve saved
I can only imagine that you have reached that moment
That moment of your freedom, mommy
I love you

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The Thought A memory of violent yellow
Splashes of bluish white jello
This was a party of parties
Yea, a whole lot of smarties
Favorite colored candies all wrapped today
The thought of a memory once tucked away

It was a thought
A selfless thought
One that was nagging you but wouldn\'t go away

A golden red leaf falls
Of early yellow-orange sunset walls
A memory that\'s coming back together
The feeling of cold tight brisk weather
A memory that could have be your own
But it wasn\'t

It was the thought
A selfless caring thought
One that is there but isn\'t your own

A bright hollow blue summer wails
As the children run bringing their pails
The Thought by ~atomicfeline

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This Day The day hits midnight
Another day has come
But this day has more light
Than the day that just went by

What makes this day so special?
A day when love is stirred in the air?
A heavy mixture that doesn\'t settle?
Living beneath the eyes of youth

But when the day has gone by like the rest
The feeling still hangs like a chain
Interlocking pieces that hold their best
Never letting go, a feeling on this day

But why is this day so dissimilar
If all the days that follow seem the same?
It\'s because this day is here as a reminder
Of all the days that passed
Of the love that was there but never expressed
A feeling that should\'ve been This Day by ~atomicfeline

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A Love to Love Everyone knows how it feels
You remember yourself blushing
You held the flowers to your heart
It feels like such a rushing
A memory of smiles comes to a start
He was brushing away your tears
Whisking away all your fears
Sighing as you watch... He nears
A sudden flight and you\'re off
He was stroking your face, your skin so soft

You\'re expecting him at nine
And you feel you\'re on a line
What shall you wear?
Or does it matter at all?
You remember him as feelings rise
Like stars from heaven, all knowing and wise
He\'s given you the sign
It\'s almost time
You make up your mind
You\'ll be seeing him again

You have never beenA Love to Love by ~atomicfeline

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On That Day You woke up late in the day
Looking out your window, you say
\"What a wonderful day to be born
The blazing sun raining worn
A rabbit leaves its footprints in snows
The leaves fall in the wind that blows
And blooming flowers
Washes away all my woes.\"

For it is that day
That fateless day
Where it all began
And it was on that day
Where the cycle ends

Yet it comes once a year
Never realizing that it\'s near
It can fall on any day
It\'s when you stop to think and say
\"Isn\'t it that day?
That fateless, inevitable day
When all of last year seems so grey
Light shades of black in white
A fuzzy memory all but forgotten?\"

For iOn That Day by ~atomicfeline

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Entry #14

May 4, 2003, 8:08:32 AM by ~atomicfeline
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"OMG! THERE IS LIKE A FISH IN THE TUNA FISH CAN IN MY PANTRY!" yelled the chicken in noob language.
"Really?" asked the chicken disbelievingly.
"YEAH! OMG! LOL! I THINK IT'S A TUNA!" said the chicken yet again in noob lanuage.

Been a while since I updated the journal, but Dalspots

finally finished making that clock I asked her to make a month and a half ago. I also went above the 300 pageview mark, and am nearing the 365 pageview mark, one for every day of the year.

Anyhow, school is almost over for me. I've been getting all A's all semester, so even if I fail the finals, I still get an A. Thus, I'm busy relaxing and drinking coffee and staying up late. You see, I just got the net on my bedroom computer recently so everything is looking up. I am not, however, applying to a Yeshiva in Israel like I should be. Laziness strikes again I guess...

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Current Residence: Maryland USA
Interests: Jazz 2, Final Fantasy, Getting work done
Favourite movie: Movies? What are those?
Favourite band or musician: Nobuo Uematsu
Favourite genre of music: Classical/Fantasy
Favourite poet or writer: Me! :)
Operating System: Windowz XP
MP3 player of choice: Winamp
Favourite game: Final Fantasy VII
Favourite gaming platform: PS2
Tools of the Trade: Microsoft Notepad :)

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~iduck Apr 15, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

*nods* Yeah I was thinking there was a little too much orange in her. I suppose I can change it to some other color, but what other color could it be? Hmm.. hmm

Thanks for the comment!

~iduck Apr 13, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

Yeah I know the sword's a little weird, but she's just holding it so I guess it's fine. I mean it's not like she's going into battle or anything :) (Smile)

Thanks for pointing it out those, thanks for the comment also! :D (Big Grin)

+spyed Apr 10, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

Have you ever had a dream, that you were so sure was real? What if you were unable to wake from that dream? How would you know the difference between the dream world and the real world?

What you know you can't explain, but you feel it. You've felt it your entire deviant life, that there's something wrong with the story. You don't know what it is, but it's there, like a splinter in your mind, driving you mad.

You take the blue pill, the story ends. Your browser closes and you believe whatever you want to believe. You take the red pill, you stay in wonderland. And, I show you how deep the rabbit hole goes.

I offer only the truth, nothing more.

Take: The Red Pill
Take: The Blue Pill

Fella

spyed, nobody has ever done this before.
Ninja

I know. That's why it's going to work.

Do not try and bend the spoon ...

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~iduck Apr 6, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

Thanks for the fac :D (Big Grin)

Very much appreciated! Hug

Glad you like it

~iduck Mar 30, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

I'm aware of the arm-wrongness now, but it's too late to change it! Ah well, thanks for the comment and pointing it out! :) (Smile)

~darkaleph Mar 25, 2003

hey, thanks for the comment ^_^; I've read the five latest poems/deviations you have so far and I've got to say, there's this catchiness to your poems..which can be likened to an old wanderer walking down a roadside singing philosophical tunes (if there is such a thing..and no offense by the way..it was a compliment and a positive overall critique^_~);.. gotta zoom..classes to attend O_o... anyhow, keep up the good work =) (Smile)

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~fezz Mar 22, 2003

Exeelent poems! X3 Ill Advertise ya on my site...chu are good.... #1 :D (Big Grin)

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Some annoying boy told me to change my signature. heres to him.

~atmcdragon Mar 5, 2003

I added you to my list. Never forget how good your poems are. I adore them alot, and you've put great amounts of vocabulary and thought in them. I feel the emotion rushing through me when I read them, you have a talent with poetry man. Never give up on it, even when things look its darkest.

In other words....

You Kick Ass.

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Aryan Pure Superman!
Ja, We ist der supermen!
Super duper superman!"

Spike Jones, you devil, you!

~martez Mar 3, 2003

Thanks for the comment on "The Last Story," I appreciate it. Yeah, I did lie to her; the worst kind, too. Well, it's a long story. But thanks for the comment :) (Smile)

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~iduck Feb 27, 2003 Hobbyist General Artist

Thanks a bunch for the comment and fav! Welcome to DA, enjoy your stay :D (Big Grin)

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